2.3 Writer's Workshop: Speech
| Site: | Cowichan Valley School District - Moodle |
| Course: | ELA8, CSS, Sferrazza |
| Book: | 2.3 Writer's Workshop: Speech |
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| Date: | Friday, 17 May 2024, 4:04 AM |
Preview-The Writing Process
Writing Goal: Speech
There is no limit to what a powerful speech can do to persuade others. To be effective, it needs to be both well-written and performed.
In this unit your task is write a speech to a specific audience to convince them of your opinion. You will also orally present your speech.
Workshop Overview: Don't forget that the Writer's Workshop consists of 2 parts.
1. Writer's Notebook: Open your writer's notebook template for Unit 2 and complete the 2 teacher-directed activities and the 3 student-directed activities.
2. Major Writing Piece: Speech
- Look at examples of an effective speech.
- Plan your own.
- Learn how to properly organize your speech
- Write a first draft.
- Revise your writing.
- Perform and submit your final draft.
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Writing Targets:
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Evaluation:
Click here for the rubric that will be used to grade your major writing assignment.
Click here for the rubric that will be used to grade your writer's notebook.
Parts of a Persuasive Essay
As a review, here is an infographic that breaks down very simply the structure of an opinion piece:
Read these points for more detail:
Writer's Notebook 2.1 Mentor Text
Read the essay and complete the chart in your writer's notebook for 2.1: Hang Up and Drive
Hang Up and Drive
You see it every day, especially in freeway traffic. A car is weaving back and forth, speeding up then slowing down, or suddenly stopping. No, it’s not a drunk driver. It’s a cell-phone driver. Cell phones are used everywhere, but on the road they are a dangerous distraction to drivers and should be prohibited.
The New England Journal of Medicine reported that “motorists using a cell phone were four times more likely to have an accident than those not using a phone.” The major problem is that the driver is not focused on the road, but on his or her conversation. Cell-phone drivers are very unpredictable: they weave, tailgate, drive too fast or too slow, make improper turns, run red lights, and even stop at green ones. It’s not only annoying; it’s hazardous.
Cell-phone-related accidents include rear-ending vehicles; running off a road and crashing into trees, fences, and buildings; flipping over; and having head-on collisions. Many of these accidents result in fatalities. In October at the California Traffic Safety Summit, experts testified that “cell phones used by drivers lead to at least 1,000 deaths per year in California.” These are the same problems that occur with drunk driving, which is strictly outlawed and harshly enforced. For the same reasons, California needs laws that restrict the use of cell phones in cars.
Until we take action to pass new laws, drivers at least need to be more responsible when using cell phones. The American Automobile Association recommends that drivers pull off the road before using a cell phone, have a passenger use it for them, or use voice mail to answer calls. Another suggestion is to keep the phone off while moving or simply not use it in the car. Before using a cell phone, drivers should think to themselves, “Is this call really that important?”
Cell phones can be a vital link in emergencies, but drivers need to use them wisely. As professional NASCAR racer John Andretti says, “Driving safely is your first responsibility.” The best road to safety is to just hang up and drive.
- See more at: https://k12.thoughtfullearning.com/studentmodels/hang-and-drive#sthash.vfphxB7q.dpuf
Hang Up and Drive
You see it every day, especially in freeway traffic. A car is weaving back and forth, speeding up then slowing down, or suddenly stopping. No, it’s not a drunk driver. It’s a cell-phone driver. Cell phones are used everywhere, but on the road they are a dangerous distraction to drivers and should be prohibited.
The New England Journal of Medicine reported that “motorists using a cell phone were four times more likely to have an accident than those not using a phone.” The major problem is that the driver is not focused on the road, but on his or her conversation. Cell-phone drivers are very unpredictable: they weave, tailgate, drive too fast or too slow, make improper turns, run red lights, and even stop at green ones. It’s not only annoying; it’s hazardous. Cell-phone-related accidents include rear-ending vehicles; running off a road and crashing into trees, fences, and buildings; flipping over; and having head-on collisions. Many of these accidents result in fatalities. In October at the California Traffic Safety Summit, experts testified that “cell phones used by drivers lead to at least 1,000 deaths per year in California.” These are the same problems that occur with drunk driving, which is strictly outlawed and harshly enforced. For the same reasons, California needs laws that restrict the use of cell phones in cars.
Until we take action to pass new laws, drivers at least need to be more responsible when using cell phones. The American Automobile Association recommends that drivers pull off the road before using a cell phone, have a passenger use it for them, or use voice mail to answer calls. Another suggestion is to keep the phone off while moving or simply not use it in the car. Before using a cell phone, drivers should think to themselves, “Is this call really that important?”
Cell phones can be a vital link in emergencies, but drivers need to use them wisely. As professional NASCAR racer John Andretti says, “Driving safely is your first responsibility.” The best road to safety is to just hang up and drive.
- See more at: https://k12.thoughtfullearning.com/studentmodels/hang-and-drive#sthash.vfphxB7q.dpufHang Up and Drive
You see it every day, especially in freeway traffic. A car is weaving back and forth, speeding up then slowing down, or suddenly stopping. No, it’s not a drunk driver. It’s a cell-phone driver. Cell phones are used everywhere, but on the road they are a dangerous distraction to drivers and should be prohibited.
The New England Journal of Medicine reported that “motorists using a cell phone were four times more likely to have an accident than those not using a phone.” The major problem is that the driver is not focused on the road, but on his or her conversation. Cell-phone drivers are very unpredictable: they weave, tailgate, drive too fast or too slow, make improper turns, run red lights, and even stop at green ones. It’s not only annoying; it’s hazardous. Cell-phone-related accidents include rear-ending vehicles; running off a road and crashing into trees, fences, and buildings; flipping over; and having head-on collisions. Many of these accidents result in fatalities. In October at the California Traffic Safety Summit, experts testified that “cell phones used by drivers lead to at least 1,000 deaths per year in California.” These are the same problems that occur with drunk driving, which is strictly outlawed and harshly enforced. For the same reasons, California needs laws that restrict the use of cell phones in cars.
Until we take action to pass new laws, drivers at least need to be more responsible when using cell phones. The American Automobile Association recommends that drivers pull off the road before using a cell phone, have a passenger use it for them, or use voice mail to answer calls. Another suggestion is to keep the phone off while moving or simply not use it in the car. Before using a cell phone, drivers should think to themselves, “Is this call really that important?”
Cell phones can be a vital link in emergencies, but drivers need to use them wisely. As professional NASCAR racer John Andretti says, “Driving safely is your first responsibility.” The best road to safety is to just hang up and drive.
- See more at: https://k12.thoughtfullearning.com/studentmodels/hang-and-drive#sthash.vfphxB7q.dpufHang Up and Drive
You see it every day, especially in freeway traffic. A car is weaving back and forth, speeding up then slowing down, or suddenly stopping. No, it’s not a drunk driver. It’s a cell-phone driver. Cell phones are used everywhere, but on the road they are a dangerous distraction to drivers and should be prohibited.
The New England Journal of Medicine reported that “motorists using a cell phone were four times more likely to have an accident than those not using a phone.” The major problem is that the driver is not focused on the road, but on his or her conversation. Cell-phone drivers are very unpredictable: they weave, tailgate, drive too fast or too slow, make improper turns, run red lights, and even stop at green ones. It’s not only annoying; it’s hazardous. Cell-phone-related accidents include rear-ending vehicles; running off a road and crashing into trees, fences, and buildings; flipping over; and having head-on collisions. Many of these accidents result in fatalities. In October at the California Traffic Safety Summit, experts testified that “cell phones used by drivers lead to at least 1,000 deaths per year in California.” These are the same problems that occur with drunk driving, which is strictly outlawed and harshly enforced. For the same reasons, California needs laws that restrict the use of cell phones in cars.
Until we take action to pass new laws, drivers at least need to be more responsible when using cell phones. The American Automobile Association recommends that drivers pull off the road before using a cell phone, have a passenger use it for them, or use voice mail to answer calls. Another suggestion is to keep the phone off while moving or simply not use it in the car. Before using a cell phone, drivers should think to themselves, “Is this call really that important?”
Cell phones can be a vital link in emergencies, but drivers need to use them wisely. As professional NASCAR racer John Andretti says, “Driving safely is your first responsibility.” The best road to safety is to just hang up and drive.
Writer's Notebook 2.2 What do you want to write about?
Now you have an opportunity to think about something that you have a strong opinion about. This may take some brainstorming.
Complete the following in your writer's notebook under entry 2.2: What do you want to write about?
1. List some things that occur in your life or in others' lives that bother you, make you angry or that you think should be different.
2. Think about these general categories and create an opinion statement about 3 of them:
School, Family, Technology, Nature, Environment, Government, Consumerism, Health, and Entertainment, Travel, Relationships, Sports
Example: a. Sports: Young athletes should play more than one sport.
3. Look at this list and pick 4 that interest you. Can you pick a primary area of focus?
Writer's Notebook Entry 2.3, 2.4, 2.5
Don't forget that for each unit you are to make a minimum of three entries that are your own.
Note: These entries do NOT necessarily need to be about persuasive writing or effective speeches but you may get some inspiration from other sources while doing this unit and decide to write them down here.
Again here are some possible sources of inspiration:
- point form
- drawings
- diagrams
- pictures
- explanations
- questions
- ideas
- responses to readings
- parts of a draft
- clippings
- poetry
- dreams and aspirations
- anything that you might use someday in a piece of writing
Or try a prompt or challenge from here.
Submit your writer's notebook (via template provided or pictures of pages out of a hand-written notebook or drop off in person or a link) to the dropbox "Writer's Notebook Unit Two"
Planning
Now is the time to start planning your speech.
For each step of this workshop you will use this template to complete your writing and hand in the same file each time you add to it.
Complete Step 1: Planning. Save your document and submit in the dropbox: Persuasive Planning: Unit 2.
When your teacher has marked this step, continue on to drafting your piece.
Drafting
Now that your outline has been approved by your teacher, you can begin your draft. Open the template and continue on to Step Two: Drafting.
Don't worry about getting things perfect. You will have a chance to get some feedback and work on editing before you submit your final draft.
When you are finished your draft submit it under the drop-box: Persuasion Draft : Unit 2
Once your teacher has marked your draft and given you some feedback on suggestions for revising in your template, complete the mini-lessons that follow, make your revisions in the template and submit your work to the drop-box: Persuasion Final Draft: Unit 2.
Remember your writing targets:
- By the end of this workshop you will have incorporated the following into your piece:
- A clear opening statement
- At least three supporting points in your body paragraphs and your speech that are supported.
- A strong conclusion.
Mini-Lesson: Transitions
Transitional devices are words or phrases that help carry a thought from one sentence to another, from one idea to another, or from one paragraph to another. And finally, transitional devices link sentences and paragraphs together smoothly so that there are no abrupt jumps or breaks between ideas. (via Purdue Owl University)
Here are some examples:
Now look at the sample essay and decide which transitions would go in which blank.
Now return to your draft and revise your work to include transitions.
Revising: Personal Revision Task
Revision is where your writing is taken to the next step.
1. Your teacher has given you feedback on one or more items to revise in your writing.
Return to your template to revise based on those comments and any other revisions you might want to make. This is an important part of the writing process and you will be marked on whether or not you were able to make the necessary revisions.
Editing
Before you submit your final draft you need to edit your draft.
Your teacher may have included some editing marks on your draft or you might get a parent or friend to proofread your paper.
In any case you should check for the following:
Capitalization
Organization: Paragraphs? Include a new paragraph when there is a new "scene".
Punctuation
Spelling
Publishing
For this writer's workshop, part of your task now is to read your speech out loud. Keep in mind the skills of a good orator that have been discussed in this unit.
Recording your Speech
Online:
Vocaroo is a very simple online recording program. When you have completed your recording, simply click the "Click here to Save." It will then give you sharing options. Please save the file to your computer (small blue links at the bottom of the box) and upload to the drop box.
Locally:
Audacity is a free application which you can load onto your computer. Don't forget to install the Lame plugin, which allows for saving to mp3 and other formats.
- Click here for a great Audacity tutorial website.
Other Free sound effect and music sites:
- https://www.pacdv.com/sounds/
- http://www.findsounds.com/types.html
- https://freemusicarchive.org/
- https://freeplaymusic.com/
- https://free-loops.com/
- http://danosongs.com
- https://incompetech.com
- https://www.seabreezecomputers.com/tips/freemusic.htm#links … an example from this site:
- https://www.taylorhayward.org/
Once you have:
- completed the mini-lesson and incorporated transitions into your writing
- revised your first draft based on feedback from your teacher
- edited your work for COPS
- checked the rubric to make sure you have included all necessary elements
- you are ready to submit your final draft and your recorded speech.
Submit under the dropbox: Persuasion Final Draft: Unit 2