ELA6, CSS, Sferrazza

NOTE: THERE ARE TWO ONLINE PAGES IN THIS BOOK FOR LESSON 1.3F.

So your rough draft is done. Now what? 

Copy your draft and paste it under "Step Three: Revising" in your template. Then, using a different colour text (red is recommended) make the changes suggested below. By using a different colour, your teacher can see your revisions. 

Check the overall content:

• Is it in the best order?
• Did I say everything you wanted to say?
• Is it all relevant?
• Should I add, subtract, move, or change anything?

Look at word choice.

• Check: Do I have figurative language? Your teacher would like to see one or more simile, one metaphor, and one or more alliterations. 
  • If you said no to any of the above, take the time to enhance your word choices. 
• Check: Have I used sensory language? Your teacher would like to see three senses addressed (sight, sound, touch/feel, taste, smell)
  • If you do not have three senses included, take the time to enhance your word choices.
  include stronger action verbs. Can you substitute, add, or remove any words? (looms, winding, pedaled, sought, absorbed, lapping, hummed)
• Check: Have I used vivid verbs and creatively applied adverbs? 
  • Where can I substitute, add, or improve any verbs and adverbs? (menacingly, casually, reluctantly, seemingly )
• Check: Have I enhanced some nouns with tantalizing adjectives? (majestic, grass-filled, endless, gentle, peaceful, threatening) 
  • Where can I substitute, add, or improve any adjectives?